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Caroline Osella (they/them)'s avatar

Subscribing. How the hell have I been overlooking this? I'm seeing it like a TV serial in my mind - the writing is vivid, cinematic. But with authentic interiority. Blending humour and BIG FEELS isn't easy, but you're giving it to us just right. Thanks!

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MA Knight's avatar

Thank you!!! 💗💗💗

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Gil Nobodi's avatar

She didnt get her number! How dare you! This was fun, even if it nearly killed the MC.

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MA Knight's avatar

Bianca might have a heart attack but what doesn’t kill her makes her stronger! Thanks for reading, Gil. And don’t worry. She’ll find the number.

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L.T. Aldous's avatar

The way you write gives so much character and emotion in Bianca, I’m enthralled. I’m already excited for the rest 👀

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MA Knight's avatar

Yippee! Super glad you liked Bianca

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Nick Winney's avatar

You nailed the angst perfectly.

Dialogue absolutely spot on. Was great to listen to, wanted more.

Good work!

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MA Knight's avatar

Thank ya, Nick!!! And thank emily for the narration 🙌

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Lock in. What a good start. The way you flow in and out of inner thought is so good all the time. And the narration!! I’m locked

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MA Knight's avatar

Isn’t the narration fucking awesome??? Thanks for reading 💗

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Edith Bow's avatar

I finally listened to the audio with it and it's the fuckin' best. I loved the visuals. As a former veteran server, it felt so real to me. I thought I commented on this but guess I'm just crazy. I am so hooked on it.

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MA Knight's avatar

I had a short lived stint as a server. I was fired bc I had “no restaurant common sense” and gave a man the wrong gelato and he was allergic to the pistachios (luckily he saw before he took a bite). It’s a hard fucking job!!!

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Edith Bow's avatar

Ps don't feel bad. I had one chef that would demote me for 2 weeks because he was a bully and then rehire me every other two weeks as a server until I finally bullied him back. You saved yourself!!!

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MA Knight's avatar

The memorization thing is insane. I’m never present enough in the moment. I had a notepad and still didn’t listen. Seems brutal. And fuck bullies! At least I sorta deserved it lol.

Being a sommelier does seem like the gift that keeps on giving

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Edith Bow's avatar

It is, lots of memorizations. I am great for parties though because I watched chefs for hours and would make them answer me what they were doing so I could story teller all their food so it was "an experience" I worked in Michelin though so like I'm sommelier in wine & sake and know every kind of alcohol in the world. It's very good for parties very useless otherwise 😭

Server work is brutal. I had to retire from restaurants because burnout is real. Allergies are so common and sometimes people don't explicitly say them or if the company doesn't require a pad for writing and you'll have to memorize it is wild. I knew one girl who could memorize 40 orders of 10 items per table without writing anything down. She was a GODDESS.

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RM Greta's avatar

damn love this all over again <3

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MA Knight's avatar

The voiceover is everything

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Emily S Hurricane's avatar

Omg 😍 I loved every second of this. Where has Gwen been all my life

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MA Knight's avatar

❤️I think she was in Oregon!!!

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Helen Grover's avatar

Late to the party with these but I love Bianca’s inner monologue and the name stitched into her uniform reminds me of patches sewn on a biker vest so it feels like foreshadowing.

I’ll say something more thoughtful when I’ve read more of the series but I really liked this

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MA Knight's avatar

Hehe thank you Helen! I like the way you think! ❤️

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Mac Sitko's avatar

Crackin’ read, that. I'm gonna now devour all of these at once.

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MA Knight's avatar

🙏 thank you! I’ll be keepin em coming, served hot

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Drew Valdez's avatar

How the flip did I miss this!? Freaking gold.

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MA Knight's avatar

THANK YOU 💕💗💖💓🩸

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Alex Shifman's avatar

This has ‘last scene from Whiplash’ Rhythm.

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MA Knight's avatar

Ok I just watched it on YouTube. Damn. Thank you 🙏 I’ll try to keep it up

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Richard Pack's avatar

Saw part 2, remembered I hadn't finished part 1, came back to catch up. Bianca is so delightfully awkward, and the way you write her feels very real. Great work!

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MA Knight's avatar

Ahhh! Thanks, Richard. I’m so glad you’re liking Bianca ❤️

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Sapna's avatar

I love Bianca and the way she is so frickin real with those emotions. I am quite excited for this.

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MA Knight's avatar

Yippee! I definitely wanted her to be relatable…haha

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MrsGreen's avatar

You are such an incredible writer!! Your words come across with such ease, effortless. Yet there is so much there. It’s enthralling. I love it.

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MA Knight's avatar

Thank you Mrs. Green!! I wish it was effortless haha but I’m glad it’s coming across that way. Thanks for reading and commenting ❤️

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Chris Hicks's avatar

Not getting a discount for one less nail seems like a ripoff. Makes me wonder how many digits you’d have to be missing before they’d consider dropping the price.

Just grow your nine nails twice as long, that’ll show them.

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MA Knight's avatar

That’s a good idea, Chris 🧠 thanks for reading!

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