Very solid second offering, hints of things to come without overtelling. I’m loving the thought machinations of Bianca, revealing who she is by how she thinks.
Dinner’s ready. Mom’s spaghetti. (Palms are sweaty, knees weak arms are heavy - that’s gonna be stuck in my head all day)
Chekhov’s Wallet: if a wallet is revealed in the first act, the dog must eat it before the third act.
Oh god now that’s stuck in my head too. I’m glad the info/character work is coming across without being too obvious/expository. Thanks for reading and commenting, Chris! 🐺
I love Shygirl. I love all the details you put in this one, tension building, so many questions swirling in my head. Love the voiceover once again. Dialogue feels natural. I don't know why but I heard the twin peaks intro in my brain for a second. I've met a wolf dog & a wolf before and I was almost eaten by a pack of coyotes once in wine country (further up in hills and mountains they get pretty aggressive in the middle of nowhere but not common in towns), the behavior you describe with coyotes and scientists is so real. I love it. I also love the character dev on Bianca, and mysterious Gwen.
This is wild in the best way. The voice, the pulse, the small-town dread stitched into every grocery store decision. Every detail pulls double-duty. 🔥
It’s FERAL, one might say??? Thank you 🙏
Very solid second offering, hints of things to come without overtelling. I’m loving the thought machinations of Bianca, revealing who she is by how she thinks.
Dinner’s ready. Mom’s spaghetti. (Palms are sweaty, knees weak arms are heavy - that’s gonna be stuck in my head all day)
Chekhov’s Wallet: if a wallet is revealed in the first act, the dog must eat it before the third act.
Oh god now that’s stuck in my head too. I’m glad the info/character work is coming across without being too obvious/expository. Thanks for reading and commenting, Chris! 🐺
I love this already SO much.
Fuck yeah!!! Me too. I can’t sleep. Help
Keep writinggggg we need the cunnilingus and violence 🤣
ON IT ✍️✍️✍️✍️🧑🏻💻
"Vegans don’t do drugs. Not the hard ones, anyway." I *love* Bianca's inner monologue. She's hilarious.
Eeee thank you! She’s much funnier than me lol
This is SO alive, I love it! Pouring one out for Peanut, though
Chapter 2 just as good as the first. Can't wait to see these "coyotes" 👀
Yippee!! I was actually a little insecure about chapter 2, so that’s great to hear
Constantine Christodoulopoulos is an incredible fucking name. This is gold. Can’t believe I’m just finding it.
😭😭😭😭 his parents really did the mostest
inject this story into my veins PLEASE
Ok! Sign this waiver first…
(Thank you so much!!)
lmao this is hilarious. “Send. I’m a fucking maniac” actually had me wheezing
💜💜💜we’ve all been there…
Cackling every time you mention she played soccer. Imagining those muscle thighs. 💦
Yeasss precisely ⚽️
Yeasss precisely ⚽️
Toooooooo good. And this! "“These folks’ll help you. They’re from the Ivy League.”" I'm going to be sniggering all day.
Hehehe have truer words ever been spoken?? Thanks for reading
I love Shygirl. I love all the details you put in this one, tension building, so many questions swirling in my head. Love the voiceover once again. Dialogue feels natural. I don't know why but I heard the twin peaks intro in my brain for a second. I've met a wolf dog & a wolf before and I was almost eaten by a pack of coyotes once in wine country (further up in hills and mountains they get pretty aggressive in the middle of nowhere but not common in towns), the behavior you describe with coyotes and scientists is so real. I love it. I also love the character dev on Bianca, and mysterious Gwen.
Ahhh. Thank you. I’ve only ever been chased by dogs with neglectful owners in South GA… but never coyotes or anything more wild.
Coyotes eh 👀👀👀
Uh oh, wild animals acting strangely. Nah, never mind. It’s nothin’. Just a few aggressive coyotes.
Loving the story and Bianca’s brain so far.
Nothing to see here… Thanks, Ed!!!!
Still funny! On to 3
What a relief!!!
I like how tangential wolf imagery is cropping up before we ever meet the gang, a pet husky, mentions of lupus, coyotes etc
Hehe! I love being a tease