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Edith Bow's avatar

Damn this is good. You should submit something to the hotel. It's so good. Loved the sensory. Nice and icky.

M.A. Knight's avatar

Thank you 🩷 I’ve thought about it. A little intimidated about creating a character that would interact with other characters others created and keeping it consistent/staying in my lane. But it would be a wonderful challenge…

Edith Bow's avatar

Emil would be your editor, so he helps with the direction & vibe so it's not as scary. It felt intimidating at first but I would just pick a story, already on there. A character you like and run it. It's a choose your own adventure. I get it though. There's a lot on there 😭. Actually I know a few characters that would be easy to slide into pretty quickly. If you wanted bullet lore.

M.A. Knight's avatar

That would be lovely, if you don’t mind!

terence's avatar

Goddamn twisted. I loved it.

M.A. Knight's avatar

Fuck yeah. THANK YOU

Mind of Matt's avatar

Oh my god, so many things that made me put a hand over my face like I was watching a horror movie I couldn't look away from.

There are so many lovely turns of phrase that are so, so horrible in the context. The fourth to last paragraph, when Sarah-Beth does her handiwork on Mullet Boy had me groaning and wincing in turns.

M.A. Knight's avatar

Ohhhh this is a dream come true to hear 👅 thank you for reading. One of my big fears is getting my tongue cut out…so.

AD Powers's avatar

Hey so this is insane lol

AD Powers's avatar

Please write more

M.A. Knight's avatar

I’m trying my darndest 🩷 thank you, AD!!!

AD Powers's avatar

OF COURSE <333

Brooke's avatar

I’m horrified. Good work!!

M.A. Knight's avatar

😍 thank you, Brooke!

CloudLace's avatar

Liked the language

April Mae September Reign's avatar

// just wow

Solace Solnova's avatar

Wow what a perfectly twisted and demented character. Truly a free woman in your insanity. The song choice was perfect, it made this read as a movie scene

M.A. Knight's avatar

Ahhhh thank you so much!!!! And thank you for listening to the song 🩷 I love putting classic country music in creepy contexts lol

Will Boucher's avatar

And the award for greatest simile of all time goes to.... drumroll please........."His hair like poopy chick feathers."

M.A. Knight's avatar

🐣 thank you, will! You must have seen a poopy chick before

Will Boucher's avatar

I’ve seen more than I care to admit

Dan Scamell's avatar

Luckily, I drank myself out of college in a matter of weeks 😏 Guess who's safe from Sarah-Beth! Fun story! Those frat boys had it coming...

M.A. Knight's avatar

Thanks for reading the ~final-~ version :-D

Saint-Lazare's avatar

Wait, that's from the person who leaves "what the fuuuuu" on my posts? COME ON & WHAT THE FUUUUπ

M.A. Knight's avatar

Heh heh heh. A different type of wtf.

Saint-Lazare's avatar

A whole other LEVEL you mean ma’am 🫡

M.A. Knight's avatar

Oh please, you cosmic horror mastermind. You’re no empty skullcap!

Saint-Lazare's avatar

Geee are you trying to make me vain, you mad gore genius?

M.A. Knight's avatar

You’re already covered in gold and jewels… it’s only fitting

Saint-Lazare's avatar

That's the crypt uniform. I prefer to hang out bare bones actually 🤭

Adriane Lord's avatar

Wow this did not disappoint 😇👻 great work

M.A. Knight's avatar

Thanks, Adriane! I’m so glad 💙

daisy cashin's avatar

mullet boy! this is wild. hell yeah.

M.A. Knight's avatar

Careful with that party in the back. Thank you!

Sapana King | Fiction Writer's avatar

"she wrenched him by his party-in-the-back" 😹

M.A. Knight's avatar

heheheheheh

Keith Long's avatar

This feels like a legendary horror character. Feels like the ‘or else’ after “treat girls good” in place of the classic horror “don’t have sex or party”

M.A. Knight's avatar

Yes. This doesn’t map on directly (Rhett isn’t here or killed), but frat boys have a reputation, and frat houses have a culture.

Keith Long's avatar

And Sarah Beth has crushes.

Marcello Iori's avatar

wow the tenderness is what makes this story work!

M.A. Knight's avatar

Thanks for noticing that, Marcello! I wasn’t interested in the more psychopathic/apathetic serial killer motivations.