This was amazing! I particularly loved all the little details that allowed me to see everything. The chewing on her hair, the plaid headband. The way she talked about Morgan wanting to die young like she was marrying death and he should be happy. The motivation behind it all, obsession and jealousy turned to righteous anger and delusional justice.
This is one of the best things I've ever read. I am disturbed that it's just on substack and not a million copy novel. I don't say this lightly, this was delivered perfectly. You reference then outshine Poe's tortured loops with a stacking of more subtle derangement. You pull from the same threads of despair and dread as Rice but your prose *actually* moves and builds without disruptive deflation. You set up conflict like King and then washed away our expectations instead of relying on it for long term tension. This isn't blowing smoke, this is exceptional work I was not prepared to experience and I hope I was able to convey that in this rant.
This was amazing! I particularly loved all the little details that allowed me to see everything. The chewing on her hair, the plaid headband. The way she talked about Morgan wanting to die young like she was marrying death and he should be happy. The motivation behind it all, obsession and jealousy turned to righteous anger and delusional justice.
Thank you so much! I’m glad the imagery was coming through
This is one of the best things I've ever read. I am disturbed that it's just on substack and not a million copy novel. I don't say this lightly, this was delivered perfectly. You reference then outshine Poe's tortured loops with a stacking of more subtle derangement. You pull from the same threads of despair and dread as Rice but your prose *actually* moves and builds without disruptive deflation. You set up conflict like King and then washed away our expectations instead of relying on it for long term tension. This isn't blowing smoke, this is exceptional work I was not prepared to experience and I hope I was able to convey that in this rant.
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Holy moly bruh. Good stuff.
WOWEEE im so glad you liked this one!!! Im going to read your comment whenever I am sad. Your support means a lot to me.
Writing this honestly took me to a dark place, but it sounds like it was worth it. I’ve since recovered bc I’ve eaten two chocolate croissants
I'm glad you diagnosed and treated the condition! lol
Gripping! I love a story that is just enough! Great work.
Just when I feared it was too much! Glad to hear you enjoyed it.